ZeroCu_ 发表于 2013-5-18 13:08
哎呀~見笑了
話說終於改好啦~
改顏色的是改過的部分~標中文的是不太會翻OTZ
黑色-原文
红色-你的改动
紫色-我的改动
蓝色-我的建议
Maybe to talk about it is so early. 【这句不太对啦.. 不能直接用中文翻译过去啊orz.. 只能用”Maybe it's too early to talk about this," 一般来说这个时候会直接转折，你就可以开始引入话题。在这里，你可以把第一第二句合在一起，这样比较合理。】But I think we should consider this problem.【这里你要说的是什么还是不明确啊orz..你要告诉别人你在说什么才行..不然别人不知道啊orz.....我建议前两句话变成这样的“Maybe it's too early to talk about (这里！这里你要加一个短语或者从句，来表达你要说的是什么...从你的eaasy来看似乎是” what we can do after we graduate"? ), but we should really think about it now(首先，用consider的话，后面要跟着as, 比如说，she's considered as a great teacher", 但是！consider不是用在这里的...consider是“认为”的意思，我觉得你想说的应该是“我们要考虑这个问题”，所以应该是“i think we should think about it"，但是这样的话用两个think，用词重复是英语的大忌！因此我把这句话改成了”but we should really think about it now"】 I would like to talk about parttime in abroad【于是我还是不知道这是什么啊摔！我上google查了也没有查到...parttime 这个词本身不存在，如果分开有兼职的意思， part time in abroad...abroad前不用加介词..于是你是想说去国外待一段时间？这句话本身没什么问题，如果在句子开头加上转折会比较顺畅，“So, today, I would like to talk about part time abroad."】. When I go home, my family always ask me about plan of future after graduate. 【go home是指你回家的动作，如果要表示”回到家“应该说”When I come home,".plan是可数名词，所以要变成future plans，毕竟你未来的计划不会是只有一条，比如说，我要嫁人啦之类的www，所以要变成复数。graduate是动词，不能直接用在after后，你可以说after graduation，改成名词就可以了。于是，“When I come home,my family always ask em about my future plans after graduation."】 Stay in China or go back to Taiwan? 【动词不能做主语的...必须要改成“Staying in China or going back to Taiwan?"】In fact, I don’t have any idea. 【idea可数，于是也要加s，但是”我完全没主意“一般来说会写成”I have no idea“于是你可以说”In fact, I have no idea.或者I don't have any ideas.“】
马上要出去...果咩...回来帮你继续改orz
At the same time, they recommenda new plan of graduation to me- parttime in abroad. Although this plan isn’t along plan. I feel this way have worth to consider. But this way is too difficultfor me. So I try hard to learn English. I look up some information in internet. Different country have different rule. In a general way, migrant laber must content two require.First, migrant laber’s age must less than 30 years old. All in all, it’s niceto be young. Second, must pass language vantage exam and take some certificate.I think this require is the most basic. At the same time, I guess this requireis the most difficult, too. In a general way, people go to USA, Canada,Australia or UK, Maybe it sound like peasant- worker in China. I think parttime abroad can make us broaden horizon. In fact, Ireally hope experience different culture for myself. Not only looking pictureof scenery(不僅僅是看照片上的風景). I guess may be this shortpresentation can’t help everyone understand about parttime in abroad. However,I look forward to giving you a new choice after graduate. Thank you.
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